Wednesday, September 1, 2010

Passive sentences often slow down and confuse readers. Rewrite the following to eliminate the passive voice:



1. Rubber coated bullets were fired into the crowd by police in riot gear.
Correction: Police in riot gear fired rubber bullets into the crowd.


2. Later in the day, the employees were informed of the layoffs by the boss himself.
Correction: The boss himself informed the employees of the layoffs later in the day.


3. With five seconds left, a three-point shot was missed by LeBron James.
Correction: LeBron James missed a three-point shot with five seconds left.


4. Tall buildings and mountain roads were avoided by Jim because he had such a fear of heights.
Correction: Jim avoided tall buildings and mountain roads because of his fear of heights.


5. The bill is being considered by the Legislature.
Correction: The Legislature is considering the bill.


6. The practice of covering up mistakes has been pursued by the government.
Corrections: The government has pursued the practice of covering up mistakes.


7. The car crash was reported by the officer at 1:30 a.m. Monday morning.
Correction: The officer reported the car crash at 1:30 a.m. Monday morning.


8. The tiny island has been destroyed by the earthquake.
Correction: The earthquake detroyed the tiny island.


9. A new law was enacted to fight crime.
Correction: The mayor enacted a new law to fight crime.


10. The candidate was abandoned.

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